Fragile were my life's canoes,
Restless were my will's torments.
It was life at hell for me..and I stood there gazing at nothingness.
..(But)
Ever since I met you O' dear pal,
Neither sorrows nor gloom did I meet.
Darkness was just a mirage, and
Strength was the shadow that followed me.
..(As)
Humanity..is for humans,
Integrity..for the immaculate,
Perpetuity is for paeans;
...Friendship..is for the soul in me and the friendship in me is for YOU..!
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However when you added additional lines, and break the word up in the wrong place, it cease being an acrostic.
... but it's one of you best and I loved the ending.
Thanks a ton for your thoughts on this. I'm honored!
Thanks a ton kind ma'am for your thoughts. And the reason behind those lines within the parenthesis is as an impetus to the word flow. I could have as well added them with the previous lines, but, I felt that it would lead to a better enunciation when inserted between two stanza points.
Thanks for pointing it out. Infact I had plans of putting a footnote as an explanation to these parenthesized words- I am glad that you pointed them.
Happy to see you here and I am glad that I have been an electron in lighting it up!
@ Chinmaya..
Thank You!
@Ofira..
Thanks a ton for your words of encouragement!
Thank you!. I am glad that you liked this.
@ Navin.
Thanks a ton for your thoughts pal.Yeah, Not a pure acrostic..Its just that i wanted to make the structure this way..:)
@ Gautham.
Thanks a ton for sharing your thoughts on this dude!
god bless
Thanks a ton for you kind and encouraging words..:)
@ Anthony
I am honored by your words sir.
Thank You!
@Maggie.
YOu got that bang on ma'am. Those words of yours gives an one-line insight into this write.
Thank You!
this was a brilliant write! i loved it a lot..!
IV this is an amazing poem. I loved it!
However when you added additional lines, and break the word up in the wrong place, it cease being an acrostic.
... but it's one of you best and I loved the ending.
Thanks a ton kind ma'am for your thoughts. And the reason behind those lines within the parenthesis is as an impetus to the word flow. I could have as well added them with the previous lines, but, I felt that it would lead to a better enunciation when inserted between two stanza points.
Thanks for pointing it out. Infact I had plans of putting a footnote as an explanation to these parenthesized words- I am glad that you pointed them.
@ Leo
Thanks a ton for your thoughts on this. I'm honored!
kudos!! wonderfully expressed! and yeah.. its no longer acrostic but what the hell its a beauty!!!
you sparked my creative light bulbs :)
Viewing it from the point of a 'work' as opposed to an acrostic makes it a narrative that is more intresting in itself..would've made a superb acrostic for sure had you stuck to the rules!!..Good 1 anyways dude!!
Very nicely written with strong words. Loved the last three lines.
m just smiling as you descrie friendship is such a sweet way !!
:) Good one Bharath!! dont think its an acrostic though
I like the line... Neither sorrows nor gloom did i meet...!!
@ Americanising desi
Happy to see you here and I am glad that I have been an electron in lighting it up!
@ Chinmaya..
Thank You!
@Ofira..
Thanks a ton for your words of encouragement!
@ Prats.
Thank you!. I am glad that you liked this.
@ Navin.
Thanks a ton for your thoughts pal.Yeah, Not a pure acrostic..Its just that i wanted to make the structure this way..:)
@ Gautham.
Thanks a ton for sharing your thoughts on this dude!
Such a sweet poem :)
god bless
A most expressive take on the prompt.
Friends do give strength to each other.
@ Shal..
Thanks a ton for you kind and encouraging words..:)
@ Anthony
I am honored by your words sir.
Thank You!
@Maggie.
YOu got that bang on ma'am. Those words of yours gives an one-line insight into this write.
Thank You!
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