Painful metamorphisms and eventful quietus;
Regretful decisiveness and jovial bleeds;
Between the slaughtering darkness and the carnaged dusk,
"LIFE"
Between the slaughtering darkness and the carnaged dusk,
Regretfully decisive and jovially bled;
Painfully metamorphic and eventfully quiet.
Regretful decisiveness and jovial bleeds;
Between the slaughtering darkness and the carnaged dusk,
"LIFE"
Between the slaughtering darkness and the carnaged dusk,
Regretfully decisive and jovially bled;
Painfully metamorphic and eventfully quiet.
It could be termed as a modified NaiSaiKu.. Wherein, i have made shuffling modifications in the reflection just to add more thump.
Your thoughts?
Your thoughts?
9 Thoughts have been Sprinkled!, Your Take? :
Post a Comment
I for one wouldn't want to have a punch up between a metamorphism and a metamorphic - if push came to shove, I'd say I like the second stanza better than the first, but only because it is easier to read...
Thanks a ton for sharing your thoughts on this.
I agree that the move sounds forced in the first stanza, but, the idea behind it was to tone the tune of the first stanza towards how life happens, while the second showing the pains of death..
Meanwhile, just justifying how thin fringed are the differences between life and death!
Thank You.
Its always been a pleasure to have your take on my writes..
Hehe..Yeah, you are the vector :)))
Lol..
I must be thanking you a million times..I told u!, short poetry is all that i can afford now..[recession you see :PP]
And thanks a ton for liking it..:)
Post a Comment